Is this a good first paragraph for my story?

That, is a magnificent starting to a story! I love how you don't just say that you didn't like Palm Beach, but explained why it was bad. Your very descriptive, which is great. The only thing I would say is when you say "The streets always busy, the people so preppy, and the atmosphere was so controlled." You should add "In Palm Beach" to the ending, so it looks like this: "The streets always busy, the people so preppy, and the atmosphere was so controlled in Palm Beach." Then continue on like you did. That way people know what town you were talking about. Definitely add that. Other than that, it is a wonderful story! I really love it and I wanted to keep reading more! You would make a amazing author one day. Good Luck and Happy Writing!